Archive for the 'Fiction' Category

Where does your story end?

In another life (an elementary school teacher for 35 years) I was frequently asked by my seven and eight year old students, “How much do I have to write?”

Good question.

In many cases I did not restrict the length of their writing and some were happy with this. Others, however, needed the security or reassurance of a set amount of lines or pages, that is, the length their piece of writing needed to be. They needed a goal to work towards. Fair enough – I have heard adults ask very similar questions (eg “When will this meeting be finished?”).

Stop when your story is finished

I remember that quite often my reply was, hopefully not sounding too flippant in doing so, “When your story is finished you can stop.” I must admit that it was tempting to leave the poor little things hanging right there. Usually I would follow up with some individual or small group help. I’d ask questions like:

  • What has happened so far?
  • What happens next?
  • Is there something you haven’t told the readers yet?
  • How are you going to resolve the problem facing the characters?

In many cases these simple questions – or others like them – can generate a new wave of thought and ideas for where the writing was heading. Of course there will always be the one or two individuals whose creativity will need a little more coaxing and coaching. These writers need more than a life line or life jacket; they need someone to haul them into the life boat and actually start rowing for them until their confidence grows.

Where does your story end?

During the week I recorded an episode of the old television series “The Avengers”. I eagerly looked forward to watching the episode a few days later when I had some time. Imagine my dismay when the recording ended some five minutes before the end of the episode. (I hadn’t considered the possibility that the programme would be running overtime. It’s a new DVD recorder and I’m still learning the tricks of successful recording.)

Did Emma Peel escape from the killers? Will Steed come to her rescue in time? I guess I’ll never know the ending. Not knowing the ending annoys me – but I’ll live.

Some short story writers love the technique of leaving the readers dangling at the end. “What happened next?” is what I would like to know. “How did it end?” and “Did they resolve the problem?” are questions left floating in the air. That’s just me – but I do like a satisfactory ending, happy or otherwise.

Where does your story end?

Good writing.

Short story: “Harry”

“Harry”

I knew him only as Harry. We had never formally met. I only knew his name because I’d overheard someone call out his name. Harry was a loner; rarely did one see him with a companion. Today I was having my lunch on the riverbank. It was an escape from the office for a few precious moments.

Harry came wandering along the path muttering to himself. He stopped at a nearby bin searching for discarded drink containers.

“He must be short of cash,” I thought. “I hope I never get that desperate.”

“Hello,” said Harry suddenly as he approached the bench where I was sitting. “It is a beautiful day and I am so glad to be alive. Are you enjoying your lunch and the warming sunshine on your back?”

I was in a slight state of shock and couldn’t answer for a few seconds. The food in my mouth almost choked me in my astonishment. Harry’s voice was deep and clear, like one suited for radio announcing or television news reading. I nodded. As I finished chewing my food I observed the raggedly dressed man who had now seated himself alongside me. His coat was torn, grubby and far too big for his slight, angular body. His shoulder length hair straggled out over the ragged collar. The dirty t-shirt hung loosely from the patched up jeans that were somehow held in place by a length of rope. The tattered sneakers appeared about two sizes too big. They had flopped along as he had approached my seat.

“You must be escaping from the jungle they call an office.”

“How can you tell?” I asked.

“It is quite obvious, my dear friend. You keep looking at your watch, and you have that look on your face as if the boss still has you on a leash.” He chuckled.

“It’s not funny,” I retorted, piqued by his sarcastic laughter.

“Sorry, I didn’t mean to be disrespectful.” He sat musing for a few moments. “It’s just that you could have been me a dozen years ago. Until.”

“Until what?” I asked as my curiosity began to be aroused by this enigma alongside of me. “What happened to you?”

“I had a breakdown,” he said simply. “I could no longer cope with the pressure to perform. I spent over six months recovering. I hardly spoke to anyone, I hardly did a thing, I often did not get… could not get out of bed for days. I lost my job. I lost my family. I lost my house. I basically lost everything except my clothes and a small investment.”

“Where do you live?”

“I had just enough money to buy a small river shack near here. I made it quite cosy. I don’t really need much. It isn’t the grandiose mansion I once dreamed of but it is my castle. I have a little vegetable patch and a few fruit trees. All in all I have a wonderful lifestyle. I am totally free to enjoy wonderful days like this.” He smiled contentedly.

I offered him my second roll. I suddenly didn’t feel so hungry.

“Thankyou.” His deep blues eyes sparkled as he looked at me.

I turned and watched the ducks gliding past. An egret stalked his lunch in the shallows. Two pelicans ponderously flew downstream. A honeyeater called somewhere in the trees above. Turtledoves cooed softly from some nearby bushes.

So peaceful.

So calm.

So restful.

I turned back to speak to old Harry.

He had silently slipped away.

The knot in my stomach seemed to tighten and the leash had become a noose.

All rights reserved.

Copyright 2007 Trevor W. Hampel.

This story was first published in “The Write Angle” May 2006.

I would appreciate readers’ comments and responses after reading this story.

Writing history as fiction

A few weeks ago I wrote about the family reunion we recently attended.

I made the following observation:

With the launch of the family history book, the bare bones of the history and heritage of my family has been well documented. I enjoy reading historical accounts but this book could only tell part of the story. During our celebrations last weekend I couldn’t help but think that the story of my family’s epic struggle for survival would make a wonderful novel or series of novels – even a film.

Turning history facts into fiction has some advantages and some pitfalls as well.

One of the advantages is that you basically have the plot line already. In many cases historical accounts are full of drama and lend themselves to retelling in fascinating ways that only a novel can achieve. It may well bring the story to life with real characters, real events and a totally believable story line.

One of the dangers, however, is that the facts may need to become blurred at the edges in order for the story to remain interesting. This may upset the historical purists, especially where family is concerned. It may be expedient to tamper with the truth for the story to remain consistent, or for the plot to be believable.

Novels and films that are “based on a true story” often raise more questions than they answer, but that sounds like the start of another article.

Good writing.

Short Fiction #38 Charlie

Charlie
Charlie stopped. He looked up, then ran to the window. Gloria had just driven into the driveway.
Charlie knew he had some explaining to do. He ran the door, waiting anxiously while Gloria rattled the keys into the lock.
“Hello Charlie. You’ve been a good boy then?”
Charlie skipped around her ankles. “Of course I’ve been good,” he thought. “I’m always good.” He thought of the thousands of times Gloria had told him how good he’d been.
Gloria dumped her shopping on the kitchen table and flopped into her favourite chair in the sun-room.
“Oh Charlie – what have you done? Look at my jig-saw puzzle? The pieces are all over the place, on the floor, under the table. Oh Charlie, can’t you leave my jig-saw alone?”
Charlie was perplexed. Why was Gloria so angry with him?
“But Kitty was sitting right on top of the coffee table,” thought Charlie. “I thought you’d be pleased that I chased Kitty away.”
Gloria ignored him. She was already busy fixing up her precious puzzle, gathering pieces from all over and struggling to get them back into place.
Charlie waddled over to his little bed by the heater, tail between his legs.

All rights reserved.

Copyright 2007 Trevor W. Hampel.

Read more of my short fiction here.

Eight Short Story Starters

The short story starters I have included on this site from time to time have proved to be very popular. If you are looking for ideas to start you off with writing short stories, look no further. I have already written a number of lists of these short story starters – just click on the links at the bottom of this post.

Here is the latest list of ideas, all with an animal or bird theme:

  1. The moment I heard the old raven’s mournful cry, I knew my day was going to be a challenge.
  2. I looked around the room. It had been thoroughly trashed. A piercing screech from behind me made me jump. There was a large parrot sitting on the curtain rail.
  3. Barney bounded off after the rabbit, barking wildly. A sudden yelp came from behind the bush. Barney came slinking back to me, blood dripping from his nose.
  4. The first thing I noticed about the room was the dead goldfish.
  5. The beautiful eagle swooped quickly towards me. I could see its outstretched talons.
  6. I peered past the tent flap. The red fox was not aware of my stealthy stare.
  7. It was obvious at once that the pelican’s wings were entangled in fishing line.
  8. “Don’t sit there,” she commanded. “That’s the cat’s chair.”

Conditions of use:

  • Feel free to use any of the story starters listed above. Change anything to suit your needs.
  • Give it your best shot.
  • Edit your work carefully before sending it off to a publisher or posting it on your blog.
  • Let me know in the comments section how it went.
  • If you publish your story on your web site or on your blog let me know so I can make a link to it for others to read.

Related articles:

So there you go.

Good writing.