Comments on: Poem #4 Drought http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/ Trevor Hampel's Blog about Writing, Literature and Teaching Sat, 04 Feb 2012 07:04:03 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1 By: Rishin Kutmut http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-197076 Rishin Kutmut Thu, 29 Sep 2011 20:17:45 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-197076 Dry arid land, Cracks in the dry mud, Looking up at the sky praying for rain. Looking into the distance, The world shimmers As the heat waves dance. Across the farm, Green is scanty, Replaced by a scorching red or brown. Birds and other animals migrate, They’re all gone, Just like the crops. Dry arid land,
Cracks in the dry mud,
Looking up at the sky praying for rain.

Looking into the distance,
The world shimmers
As the heat waves dance.

Across the farm,
Green is scanty,
Replaced by a scorching red or brown.

Birds and other animals migrate,
They’re all gone,
Just like the crops.

]]> By: ED http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-197075 ED Thu, 29 Sep 2011 20:17:04 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-197075 Incredible poem Rishin k Incredible poem Rishin k

]]> By: Rishin Kutmut http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-197071 Rishin Kutmut Thu, 29 Sep 2011 20:15:56 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-197071 What do you think of this poem I wrote. I used some parts and changed them slightly if that's alright. Dry arid land, Cracks in the dry mud, Looking up at the sky praying for rain. Looking into the distance, The world shimmers As the heat waves dance. Across the farm, Green is scanty, Replaced by a scorching red or brown. Birds and other animals migrate, They’re all gone, Just like the crops. What do you think of this poem I wrote. I used some parts and changed them slightly if that’s alright.

Dry arid land,
Cracks in the dry mud,
Looking up at the sky praying for rain.

Looking into the distance,
The world shimmers
As the heat waves dance.

Across the farm,
Green is scanty,
Replaced by a scorching red or brown.

Birds and other animals migrate,
They’re all gone,
Just like the crops.

]]> By: Rishin Kutmut http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-197066 Rishin Kutmut Thu, 29 Sep 2011 19:59:40 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-197066 Exellent i mean Exellent i mean

]]> By: Rishin Kutmut http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-197065 Rishin Kutmut Thu, 29 Sep 2011 19:57:57 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-197065 I think this poem is intelligent but also could use better use of words. The best poems in English say the most in the least. Meaning that in this poem many words are wasted. However I must say that the use of description and different realistic scenery is exellen. I think this poem is intelligent but also could use better use of words. The best poems in English say the most in the least. Meaning that in this poem many words are wasted. However I must say that the use of description and different realistic scenery is exellen.

]]> By: surbhi http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-176073 surbhi Mon, 27 Jun 2011 13:05:03 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-176073 Hi.i am from India.i love this poem very much.This is a awesome poem. Hi.i am from India.i love this poem very much.This is a awesome poem.

]]> By: Jess Hartley http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-150661 Jess Hartley Mon, 07 Feb 2011 18:51:42 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-150661 hey trevor im from london beautiful poem stunning imagery (: hey trevor
im from london beautiful poem stunning imagery (:

]]> By: lolololololo http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-113947 lolololololo Sat, 21 Aug 2010 05:43:49 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-113947 Hello Trevor I was wondering if I can use this poem for my school assignment cause it is such a beautiful poem. Please reply ASAP cause I need o hand in my assignment soon thanks Hello Trevor
I was wondering if I can use this poem for my school assignment cause it is such a beautiful poem.
Please reply ASAP cause I need o hand in my assignment soon
thanks

]]> By: lolololololo http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-113946 lolololololo Sat, 21 Aug 2010 05:41:18 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-113946 Dw guys I found who wrote it I guess i wasent looking properly at the start lololololol Dw guys I found who wrote it
I guess i wasent looking properly at the start
lololololol

]]> By: lolololololo http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/comment-page-1/#comment-113945 lolololololo Sat, 21 Aug 2010 05:37:27 +0000 http://www.trevorhampel.com/poem-4-drought/#comment-113945 I love this poem But please someone tell me who is the poem write I need this for my assigment ASAP Thanks LOve this poem so much I love this poem
But please someone tell me who is the poem write I need this for my assigment ASAP
Thanks
LOve this poem so much

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